Advice on my first page of IT'S NOT ME from Angela Eschler

A couple of editor's over at Eschler Editing critiqued my first page and post it here on their blog. Good advice for me! I can totally strengthen my first page hook, stakes and too much info.

Go read their advice and leave a message on what you think. I'd love to hear from you!

Angela, Heidi and other editors on a panel for Pleasant Grove Library. (Angela is the one with all the hair). ;)